BtVS: Le Petit Mort (1/1) First Slayer/OFC - FRAO/NC-17

[snogged]

Holy crap, you gals and guys, I managed to conquer my fic challenge! WOO!

Title: Le Petit Mort

Author: snogged

Disclaimer: Joss Whedon and many other corporations own the characters of Buffy the Vampire Slayer. I don’t.

Pairing: First Slayer/OFC

Rating/Warnings: FRAO/NC-17; sex, language, hunting violence

Word Count: 512

Summary: Death is her gift.

Beta Crew: velvetwhip. All other mistakes are mine.

Author’s Note: Written for femslash_minis Round 76 (my apologies for my lateness). I was assigned to write for Lamia Archer who requested First Slayer/OFC and the following elements: rabbit skin, bones, and sunsets. I hope this suits your needs, hun.




Art by snowpuppies


I.

The elders chant, laying their crippled, decaying fingers upon your weary head:

Death is your gift.

The demons cry, writhing in pain as they burst into swirls of smoke and desert dust. You are stronger than they and they submit to the wooden stake as it passes through skin and flesh and heart.

Death is your gift.

The rabbit bleeds, barely twitching as the silver blade in your hand divests it of its soft black fur. This is the fur that will bring comfort to your body. The meat inside will be your dinner. The fragile, sturdy bones will be your presentation to the Gods, requesting their protection.

Death is your gift.

This is who you are, what you know, and what you will always be.

Death is your gift.

But it’s her gift too and you cannot help but wonder if there is a possibility that she knows how to use it better than you.

II.

Her body presses against yours, forcing the gnarled branches of the Joshua tree to dig into your spine. Her breath is hot against your cheek, her forked tongue flicks across your jaw like a snake searching for the scent of fear in its prey. She should know by now that she will find no fear pulsing through your veins, but she searches for it anyway, hoping one day she’ll find a rabbit she can gut and devour instead of the warrior you will always be.

Your eyes do not focus on the flesh that rubs against you, on the fire that burns within your loins as her fingers slide underneath the hem of your leather skirt and into the places where the skin creases and folds, where your mysteries lie, eager to lay themselves bare for her greedy mouth to feast on.

Her eyes, dark and sinister, roll back inside her head, clearly seeking out the mental imagery that will shape her intentions. She will fuck you with her fingers and make your hips buck like a deer in heat. She will make you grunt, make you scream. She will find the demons tied to your soul and she will unleash them in a whirlwind of ecstasy and magic.

As your body surrenders itself to her, you do not close your eyes. You do not lose yourself completely in the sensations because you know that is a weakness. She cannot know your weaknesses for if she does, she will defeat you.

Instead, you focus your gaze on the flame of the sun, vibrantly orange and bloody red, dipping its face towards the Earth. You watch as it comes dangerously close to the line of trees, but you know it will never burn them. The trees never sizzle or pop. They remain there so that you can continue to slay the demons, the vampires, the forces of darkness.

Except for her.

She cannot be killed and you accept that.

She will live as long as you live.

She will breathe as long as you breathe.

First Evil.

First Slayer.

You are both the beginning, but you have no end.

Comments

[aaronlisa.livejournal.com]

Wow that was very powerful. Well done.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thanks!
I'm bouncing with glee right now because this challenge seemed so difficult six hours ago and now I have a finished product and I'm proud! /dork.

[velvetwhip.livejournal.com]

This is absolutely some of your finest work ever. Be proud.


Gabrielle

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much for your help!

[carlyinrome.livejournal.com]

This is fantastic. There are so many things I love about it: the dark, magical tone; the brilliant use of second person; the steady, heavy rhythm; the old-timey, mythical word choice. In so few words, you did so much for the characters. Thank you.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thank you so very much for giving me this challenge, hun! You really made me stretch myself as a writer and that is worthy of praise.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thank you!!

[slaymesoftly.livejournal.com]

Well done. Powerful and evocative.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[queensmoot.livejournal.com]

Aah this is wonderful! I really love the prose in the second part in particular.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[angelskuuipo.livejournal.com]

Okay, that is freakin' fabulous, hon! I love the symmetry of them being two sides of the same coin. This is really excellent.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much!

[aadler]

Solid language, vivid imagery. The linking (pairing, connection, fundamental relation) between First Slayer and First Evil has a deep plausibility to it …

… but I can’t help thinking the Slayer we know best, would strongly disagree.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

I'm glad you found it plausible.
Thanks for reading.

[jerzeyanjel.livejournal.com]

Wow this is indeed powerful. The imagery is fantastic. I could see everything as you wrote it. Fabulous work!

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!

You've been Nominated at The Absence of Light Awards!

[snowpuppies (from livejournal.com)]

This message is to inform you that you've been nominated at absence_oflight.

All nominations MUST be accepted by January 31. To do so, please respond to this comment. You only have to respond once per round, (in the event that you receive this message more than once for multiple nominations). We ask you to post a link back to us, however this is not required to win.

Your nominations:

Le Petit Mort by Snogged (NC17; First Slayer/OFC)
http://snogged.livejournal.com/722691.html

Category: Best Drabble/Ficlet

And if you want to say thanks, why not spread the love and nominate someone else?

Re: You've been Nominated at The Absence of Light Awards!

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!

Here from buffyversetop5

[yourlibrarian]

Oh how marvelous!

Also, love your LJ banner :)

Re: Here from buffyversetop5

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[thenniel.livejournal.com]

Here from absence_oflight

Very unique and powerful look at the First Slayer.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[red-satin-doll.livejournal.com]

The rating had kept me away from this story but kikimay recommended it highly - a pairing I had never thought to conceive, utterly mythic somehow, and a very very powerful ending. (I also loved the sparse, spare repetitions of the beginning)

[snogged.livejournal.com]

WOW!

Thank you so much for giving it a try. It's nice to know this little story is being recommended to others.

[red-satin-doll.livejournal.com]

I love the fact that the internet is a library of sorts, plus coffeehouse/tearoom, where all this wonderful conversation happens and all these stories and essays are still waiting to be read. And kikimay has a very fine eye for good stories, so I trust her recommendations.

[red-satin-doll.livejournal.com]

Congratulations on the "Fan Fave" win at the Absence of Light awards, sweetie! Awesome.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

*squish*
Thanks!

[yosso15.livejournal.com]

Wow this is very powerful and intense. Brilliant writing!

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!

Here from the Feedbackathon

[scratchingpost1.livejournal.com]

This came across as more poetry than story. I don't know of you intended that, but it really has a poetic feel to it. I like that about it.

I really like how you kept repeating the line "Death is your gift." I believe that line repeated that way it is helped to keep the pacing in the first part. Without it, the first part would have been too short. That line also did well to set up the mood for the second part.

As for the second part, I don't think I've ever read a sex scene that was so artfully done. It kind of sneaks up on you and carries you away to the end.

Now, the ending really surprised me. I feel that I should have expected that twist of the First Evil being there, but I was so swept up in the poetry that it was truly a plot twist when I read it.

Having said all that, I also want to say that I really enjoyed reading this. It's not what I would normally read, but I did enjoy it. Great job! Thank you for writing and sharing with everyone.

Re: Here from the Feedbackathon

[snogged.livejournal.com]

I agree that this is story is more poetry-prose than prose.

I'm really glad that this story worked for you. :)

Thanks for the feedback!

Feedbackathon comment!

[ladycallie.livejournal.com]

Hi there! What a joy this was to read, oh my. You have a fantastic visual here, I loved the visceral images of the rabbit being skinned, The First's forked tongue, the references to hunter and prey. This paragraph is just gorgeous:

Instead, you focus your gaze on the flame of the sun, vibrantly orange and bloody red, dipping its face towards the Earth. You watch as it comes dangerously close to the line of trees, but you know it will never burn them. The trees never sizzle or pop. They remain there so that you can continue to slay the demons, the vampires, the forces of darkness.

Trees sizzling is such an honest statement, but it really stood out for me. I had perfect clarity and connection to her vision of the sunset.

I do wish it were longer, as I would absolutely read more. For a short fic, your pace is good and the ending is crisp, but not overly abrupt. I think you could continue with this though, maybe make a series of shorts? Or even flip sides and write from The First's perspective.

Re: Feedbackathon comment!

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thank you so very much!!

I will take your ideas into consideration.

Here from buffyversetop5

[yourlibrarian]

Such an interesting look at her origins!

Re: Here from buffyversetop5

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

First Slayer/First Evil Pairing... or should I say "Coupling"

[vantiri.livejournal.com]

Well, this is kind of fun,,, talk about an evil lover- that's exactly how they'd see eachother!

Isn't this a nifty little story, and kind of weird... this is actually quite nice as far as stories go, and I was looking for this for quite some time, so I am delighted to have found it again!

Your work is spectacular, Snogged!

I plan on putting this in my "Memorable Entries" function and sharing it, Your opinion on that please.

I await your answer before I do anything, but please don't daudle.

Sincerely your fan,
Vantiri

Re: First Slayer/First Evil Pairing... or should I say "Coupling"

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Thanks.
I appreciate you think it's worthy to add to your memories. Yes, you can share.

Re: First Slayer/First Evil Pairing... or should I say "Coupling"

[vantiri.livejournal.com]

Almost all of your work, if not all of your work is worthy to add to memories, Snogged. I am, in fact, honored to be able to do this.

Mainly I am eyeing the Willow/Kennedy stuff "self-destruct button" and the Veruca/VampWillow ones as well.

IS there Any specific ones that you don't want me to share? This I think would be far easier and a far better way to decide which ones to aviod sharing, then I would have free reign to add the others into my journal with your name attached to them (I will NOT plagerize Anything!), and we'd both be happy.

Sincerely your fan, You've bagged me with your wonderful stories,
Vantiri.

Re: First Slayer/First Evil Pairing... or should I say "Coupling"

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Actually, I would prefer that you continue to ask. I have written many, many stories over the years and do not have time to produce a list for you.

P.S. "Self-Destruct Button" is not a Willow/Kennedy story. It's a Willow/Spike story. Kennedy is not treated kindly.

Re: First Slayer/First Evil Pairing... or should I say "Coupling"

[vantiri.livejournal.com]

Ok, I'll continue asking individually, story by story, but I may end up asking several times in regards to some stories- fair advance warning so I don't annoy you.

Self-Destruct Button seems to be findable under the catagory of Willow/Kennedy, but as you wrote the story, I take your word for that.

I am asking now about if I may add that one to my Livejournal via the "Share" button, and if you check, you'll find that all your stories you gave me permission will always be credited to yourself- I won't steal anything, of that I promise!

I kind of like that one, but it is long.

You said that "Kennedy isn't treated kindly" is that in the story, or by you, or by many fans, or any combonation of the above? I really want to understand.
I guess I'm one of her fans- for a number of reasons, one of which is that some fans of hers quite unintentionally made her kind of my adopted sister... I hate her actions in some regards, but love the girl (character), so in a surprising number of my tales, she's good- not in all of her behavior, but all in all.
If she isn't treated kindly by other fans, why not stand up for her? I don't mean to run you down, I am after information on your views regarding her.
The story that made me sort-of fall in love with her was "Guarded" Season 9 Vol 3 of Buffy, after that I started to love her and genuienly feel for her.

Sincerely;
Vantiri.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

I would actually recommend that you read the story before you move forward with sharing it.

The reason there's a Willow/Kennedy tag is that Willow and Kennedy are living in Brazil when Willow gets invited to Los Angeles by one of the members of the Black Thorn.

You may also want to consider just sharing this link on your journal: http://snogged.livejournal.com/tag/fic%3A%20self%20destruct%20button

Then you can tell people to come check out the link if they want to read the story. It is multiple chapters and it seems unfair to flood your friends list by sharing each chapter individually.

I don't really feel that I need to defend my views about Kennedy. I just don't like the character.