Deleted Scenes Meme

[snogged]

Comment with a story I've written, and I will tell you something about the story that didn't make it onto the page.

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[velvetwhip.livejournal.com]

How about My Will Be Done?


Gabrielle

[otempora42.livejournal.com]

The Granola!Barney/Pretentious!Ted fic.

[purplefeen.livejournal.com]

Wrong Number!! :)

[idioticonion.livejournal.com]

I loved this one:

http://snogged.livejournal.com/345062.html

"Siren thy name is Lily"

Tell me something I don't know about it?

[snogged.livejournal.com]

which version? Original or Alternate?

[purplefeen.livejournal.com]

alternate

[promethia_tenk]

Because it is fresh in my head and because it was awesome: Malicious.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

This is probably not what you were expecting but I figure I have reign to discuss my writing process with this meme so here we go:

I have to say just from reading that fic again that I don't like how it ends.

Angel showed up to heal her but then he leaves again. Although the kiss is there at the end and there's hope for the future, Willow's heart is probably not fully mended.

So I guess I'd want to adjust the ending to keep Angel around or explore Willow's feelings at a more in-depth level now that's he gone.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

The beginning should be longer.

I feel like I barely touched on Ted's motives or explained why Ted would be going after dudes considering how vocal Dr. X is about girls.

Also, I wish I had added some hot boy on boy sex. I might have to do that in a sequel :)

[snogged.livejournal.com]

Willow's jaw dropped. What on Earth was he talking about? Were Spike and Buffy having sex? Or riding each other hard, as Spike had so bluntly put it. She considered hanging up the phone right then and there, but then another thought popped into her head. Spike was obviously interested in a phone conversation of explicit sexual material and what was the harm of playing along if he thought she was Buffy? There were voice augmentation spells so it wouldn't even be difficult to pretend a fake voice at all. Also, it had been so long since she had done anything sexual. She muttered the words to invoke the augmentation spell and thought about what Buffy would even say to him.

Well, to start, I'd say I missed the explanation of why Willow would forgo her lesbian sexual desires to have phone sex with Spike. I really feel I could have built on this part a little bit more. I mean, I do that later but this particular paragraph has that feel that the explanation should be sooner. Or at the very least, have Willow become an investigative type because she's sickly curious about the relationship with Spike/Buffy and wants to know what they get up too when no one is around.

The sequel for this is definitely in its planning stages though which I'm excited about.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

That next Christmas, Barney and Lily totally do it :) They have smutty hot sex in every corner of Ted's apartment while everyone else is sitting down at the bar.

With the story itself, I'd say that Barney does feel some guilt because he always thought Marshall and Lily were the perfect couple. But with the way Lily comes on to him, he suspects a change in the wind and his perverted mind is willing to float on the clouds.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

I do wish I had given Fred and Angelus more time to banter, more time for Angelus to push her towards sex.

Also, I'd love to see another one with these two where the BDSM toys came out. I bet Angelus would have a blast marking her skin with a whip :)

[snogged.livejournal.com]

There were lyrics that didn't get included in this fic because I didn't think they quite fit what I was trying to accomplish

Examples:
And it's sad but true
Out of cash and I.O.U's That last line in that stanza just didn't fit for me so I left it out.

Brass buttons on your coat hold the cold
In the shape of a heart that they cut out of stone

There was something about this stanza that didn't seem necessary. It was just as effective to include the second half about letting him have his way.

[idioticonion.livejournal.com]

Mmmmm. I knew it.

Diiiiiiiiiirty. Hehe.

[velvetwhip.livejournal.com]

That's a valid point of view. Hmmm...


Gabrielle

[promethia_tenk]

Thanks! Yeah, I think the lyrics you did use worked better. Still love this one.

[snogged.livejournal.com]

I do too.

It's definitely one of my proudest achivements for the year :)